Saturday, April 3, 2010

Raaz

(राज़) 

Laughing, I ran away from Manoj.
He’d won a kiss from the spinning bottle –
but I felt like making him work a little
before consenting.

From the clearing I went into the evenly
planted pine rows, hiding from Manoj
behind one. I heard him shout, run by,
went round the tree to avoid discovery.

He shouted about the mansion
at the end of the forest, I peeked
and saw it. Not to go in there,
he said, that it was forbidden.

It drew me. I waited for Manoj
to rejoin our friends, who were
singing and laughing in the distance,
and then went closer, to the black

iron fence. The place looked
deserted except for vivid reflections
in the windows. Flashes of people
and violent changes in temper.

A breath of air struck my neck,
as from somebody close by.
I turned, and there was no-one.
Eery, I thought, and noticed

that daylight had clouded over.
Now there was sooty dark
and a shiver as from an impending
storm. Not to worry, I told myself,

you simply walk back. But my
friends’ merry noises were gone.
I walked and again felt a breath
in my back, longer this time,

more forceful, as if from giant
lungs. And there was noise
to it, the suppressed roar
an immense animal would make.

I stood and turned – not a thing –
turned and resumed walking.
Roar and cold air, an impatient
howl. I turned and saw –

– Johannes Beilharz (© 2010)

This is a rather free retelling of what I remember of the beginning of Raaz (Secret), a Hindi horror film from 2002, which, very quickly and successfully, sets up a scary atmosphere with very simple means, so that this fits in very well with Napowrimo #3, Scared yet?.

8 comments:

Aayushi Mehta said...

Scared definitely! :) Liked this!

I don't remember the movie at all though, sadly!

Leonard Blumfeld said...

Thanks, Aayushi!

The movie is well-made and quite scary; I'd really recommend it if you like that kind of stuff.

Vita Stunder said...

The ending in this poem are amazing!
I loved it :)

Anna

Greyscale Territory said...

Beautiful series of dramatic tensions! Especially loved the concept of "sooty dark"!

flaubert said...

I love the last stanza!
Pamela

Stan Ski said...

Good NaPoWriMo!
I'm doing it too.

Yousei Hime said...

Yay! Another NaPoWriMo contributor. I'm trying it for the first time. Lots of work but lots of joy. Liked what you shared. Thank you for it.

b said...

This is a great idea for a poem...very good.

b