Wednesday, December 31, 2008

New Year’s Eve Cinquain

To A.B.*

May you
be happy with
the choices you make for
the year to come, no matter what
they are.

* whose choices most likely won’t include hers truly

My first attempt at a cinquain upon instigation by Totally Optional Prompts. The specialty of this one are a few run-on line endings. All in all, this might not be my dearest wish, but it’s wishing someone happiness by doing what she considers to be the right thing with any self-interest on my part removed. And that might not be the worst to wish for somebody.

– Len “On the Brink” Blumfeld (© 2008)

Definition of the form
A cinquain is a short, unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines.
(Definition by Linda Jacobs at Totally Optional Prompts)


Linda Jacobs said...

I like the simplicity of this! The humbleness shines through! And the pain!

Tumblewords: said...

Interesting thoughts! Depth and power in these short lines.

Anonymous said...

Nicely done, it looks like you've mastered this form!

Anonymous said...

Good one. Very well done too!

Have a great creative new year!

Butterfly Cinquain

little wing writer said...

beautiful words with just a hint of mystery... *is that the choice that you would have made if it was in your power???

GEM said...

This is a generous wish - even if the outcome may not be one you hope for. G