Verde, que te quiero verdeMy smooth approach
– Federico García Lorca
did not help –
again, again
its green smoothness eluded me
I approached harshly
this time,
and its smooth greenness
shrank away
Again, again –
do not approach me smoothly
Who are you
to sneak like this?
I knew about you,
from the start, your steps
make my quartz structure
tremble
Again, again
my green
Approach me
with me in mind
Approach me green,
you’ll be inside,
you will be smoothly
– Leonard Blumfeld (© 2008)
Note
Written in response to today’s prompt at Three Word Wednesday, which was to write using these three words: approach, bottle, smooth. In García Lorca’s poem the wind is green ... here it’s a prosaic bottle. Or is it?
Oops
Just noticed that I did not use bottle! Well, since it's all about one, do I need to name it?
So. You missed a word. I missed that until you mentioned it! Nice post, it rolled right along.
ReplyDeleteThanks, tumblewords.
ReplyDeleteI had "bottle" in there originally, but removed it in the course of revision, and then did not even miss its absence.
It conjures up the image of a bottle. I suppose, the word is not needed..:-)
ReplyDeleteI liked green smoothness..
bag and baggage
Nicely done, I liked the plays on green and smoothly a lot. As to the bottle - it's the thought that counts. Dayenu.
ReplyDeleteWhiskey...Whiskey
I wouldn't have noticed had you not pointed it out :)
ReplyDeleteYou might think I'm crazy, but since you started out with Lorca's poetry first, I thought you were writing about Absinthe for most of the poem.