Wednesday, December 31, 2008

New Year’s Eve Cinquain

To A.B.*

May you
be happy with
the choices you make for
the year to come, no matter what
they are.

* whose choices most likely won’t include hers truly

My first attempt at a cinquain upon instigation by Totally Optional Prompts. The specialty of this one are a few run-on line endings. All in all, this might not be my dearest wish, but it’s wishing someone happiness by doing what she considers to be the right thing with any self-interest on my part removed. And that might not be the worst to wish for somebody.

– Len “On the Brink” Blumfeld (© 2008)

Definition of the form
A cinquain is a short, unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines.
(Definition by Linda Jacobs at Totally Optional Prompts)

6 comments:

Linda Jacobs said...

I like the simplicity of this! The humbleness shines through! And the pain!

Tumblewords: said...

Interesting thoughts! Depth and power in these short lines.

Sweet Talking Guy.. said...

Nicely done, it looks like you've mastered this form!

gautami tripathy said...

Good one. Very well done too!

Have a great creative new year!


Butterfly Cinquain

OneMoreBeliever said...

beautiful words with just a hint of mystery... *is that the choice that you would have made if it was in your power???

GEM said...

This is a generous wish - even if the outcome may not be one you hope for. G